Writing Screen Media

I wrote a script for my 6 min film titled 'night out'. I had used my research on crime culture to generate the ideas for the script. The plot of outline was based around three friends that go out for night out and one of them make the mistake of pulling the wrong girl. The girl's brother, a gang member, doesn't like her choice in men men and decides to kill him in the toilets. We find out that they were deeply in love and the road of revenage start to unwind.
I decided to let a 3rd year fine art student Peter Williams read my script and discussed the problems with the script.